Mandy's Poetry

Gonna Be Famous! · 01-29-2006

This first poem is called "Is This Really Love?"
This is one of the first poems I have ever written. I will be expecting tough critisism. I want to know exactly what you think and what you think I should work on so that I will be able to improve.

Is This Really Love?

Every time I hear your voice,
my heart beats just a little faster.
Whenever I am sad or lonely,
I know you'll always be there.
No matter how badly I am feeling,
you can always make me smile.
It feels good to have someone,
who might actually care about me.
I still don't know if I should believe you when you say you love me,
But I am beginning to trust you more and more.
When I first met you,
I was scared to love you.
I couldn't believe I could fall for someone so fast.
Is this really love or just another stupid crush?
I'm scared to love you and then get my heart broken.
I want to believe you when you say you care about me and always will.
I want to believe that you really do love me.
I just don't want to end up getting hurt,
I don't think I could handle losing you.
You say that you would never hurt me;
you say you love me way too much.
But I know my heart will be broken in the end,
you will find someone else to replace me.
I might as well enjoy it while I can,
having someone who at least acts like they care.
So please tell me if this really is love...

Mickey89 · 01-31-2006

that was great! i luved it. it felt so real to me cause i sort of went through the same thing.

Gonna Be Famous! · 01-31-2006

Here it is.

And So I Thought

I thought things were good now
I thought we'd overcome the bad
Now I see through the illusion
Of the love I thought we had

You told me that you met her
Now you don't know what to do
I smiled and said "Just pick her
I'll be fine not having you"

But I couldn't hold my tears back
So I whispered "Got to go..."
Then I quickly hung the phone up
So my hurting wouldn't show

Now I'm shaking and I'm crying
And I don't know what to do
Cause the truth is, I was lying
I can't make it without you

Jay's Cheerleader · 03-01-2006

I LOVE this! It's so great. You're a great writer, Mandy

cyaya1491 · 03-02-2006

definetly a good writer keep it up

dark moon · 03-03-2006

great, your really talented

dontwalkaway · 03-04-2006

AWWWW!! I loved it. You're a good writer. The last one was my favorite. I could relate to it.

w12ath · 03-04-2006

Good poem.

01-29-2006	#1 (permalink)
Gonna Be Famous! Eligible for a custom title Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: San Francisco, California Posts: 160	Mandy's Poetry This first poem is called "Is This Really Love?" This is one of the first poems I have ever written. I will be expecting tough critisism. I want to know exactly what you think and what you think I should work on so that I will be able to improve. Is This Really Love? Every time I hear your voice, my heart beats just a little faster. Whenever I am sad or lonely, I know you'll always be there. No matter how badly I am feeling, you can always make me smile. It feels good to have someone, who might actually care about me. I still don't know if I should believe you when you say you love me, But I am beginning to trust you more and more. When I first met you, I was scared to love you. I couldn't believe I could fall for someone so fast. Is this really love or just another stupid crush? I'm scared to love you and then get my heart broken. I want to believe you when you say you care about me and always will. I want to believe that you really do love me. I just don't want to end up getting hurt, I don't think I could handle losing you. You say that you would never hurt me; you say you love me way too much. But I know my heart will be broken in the end, you will find someone else to replace me. I might as well enjoy it while I can, having someone who at least acts like they care. So please tell me if this really is love...

01-31-2006	#3 (permalink)
Gonna Be Famous! Eligible for a custom title Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: San Francisco, California Posts: 160	Here it is. And So I Thought I thought things were good now I thought we'd overcome the bad Now I see through the illusion Of the love I thought we had You told me that you met her Now you don't know what to do I smiled and said "Just pick her I'll be fine not having you" But I couldn't hold my tears back So I whispered "Got to go..." Then I quickly hung the phone up So my hurting wouldn't show Now I'm shaking and I'm crying And I don't know what to do Cause the truth is, I was lying I can't make it without you
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03-01-2006	#4 (permalink)
Jay's Cheerleader Interested participant Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: California Posts: 19	I LOVE this! It's so great. You're a great writer, Mandy
	AND DON'T LET ANYONE EVER MAKE YOU FEEL LIKE YOU DON'T DESERVE WHAT YOU WANT

03-03-2006	#6 (permalink)
dark moon Eligible for a custom title Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Canada, Quebec Posts: 919	great, your really talented
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03-04-2006	#7 (permalink)
dontwalkaway Commentator Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 33	AWWWW!! I loved it. You're a good writer. The last one was my favorite. I could relate to it.
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01-31-2006	#2 (permalink)
Mickey89 Interested participant Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: US Posts: 27	that was great! i luved it. it felt so real to me cause i sort of went through the same thing.

03-02-2006	#5 (permalink)
cyaya1491 Interested participant Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 16	definetly a good writer keep it up

03-04-2006	#8 (permalink)
w12ath Just getting started Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 14	Good poem.