My friend wrote this poem while going through depression.
Tell me what you think of it.


The Reason
I look up at the sky
And ask him why
He put me through pain
When I prayed in the rain
Yet I sit still
And cry against my will
Tears fall on the ground
I scream without sound
I am alive yet dead
Invisible blood I’ve bled
I fought to the end
I’ve a torn heart to mend
You were wrong
To sing this death song
This happens every day
Each time a different way
Each causes tears
Using dark fears
Creating a prison
Where no one will listen
To those locked away
Those pained must always pay
My thoughts explode within
I feel I never can win
I feel like a mime
Who never has time
And everyone stares
But nobody cares
That feeling inside
Tells me to hide
Always wanting to run
To make this all done
My emotions run wild
I’m like a lost child
Trapped within lies
Before my very eyes
Sightless and soundless
Mindless and boundless
Unseen and unheard
Obscure and absurd
The reason for all
The reason I fall
But the reason is gone
With nothing to fall on
I’m a dying swam dancer
Just give me the answer
To the question I send
Will the pain ever end?

I think the poem is alright. I do think it needs some work though. Poems don't always have to rhyme and I think the poem is too straight forward. I think she should have thrown in some other things like metaphors, similes, and more descriptive adjectives. It seems like the poem was just thrown together somewhat. Just to me it seems rather confusing.

She said thanx

dont listen, its beautiful

She says thanx. She wrote it while she was going throught depression cuz a close friend died...