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theyoungandthehopeless · 12-26-2006

I just wrote this today, and it's probably the first poem i wrote that i'm satisfied with.

the paper flew,
the words carved in,
saying i love you
start to end

stuffed in the envelope and posted in the mail,
addressed to heaven, from below
when the postmen see, they exhale
we're going to have to let it go

this neatly written letter,
from a boy missin his girl
who's gone to somewhere better

Good? Bad? Sucked? Rocked?
Constructive criticism.
Personally, i loved my first verse.

Keep in mind i'm only twelve.

[like that'll change anything]

12-26-2006	#1 (permalink)
theyoungandthehopeless Eligible for a custom title Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Singapore. Posts: 177	Untitled. [It's a poem btw.] I just wrote this today, and it's probably the first poem i wrote that i'm satisfied with. the paper flew, the words carved in, saying i love you start to end stuffed in the envelope and posted in the mail, addressed to heaven, from below when the postmen see, they exhale we're going to have to let it go this neatly written letter, from a boy missin his girl who's gone to somewhere better Good? Bad? Sucked? Rocked? Constructive criticism. Personally, i loved my first verse. Keep in mind i'm only twelve. [like that'll change anything]