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Old 01-29-2006   #1 (permalink)
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Default Mandy's Poetry

This first poem is called "Is This Really Love?"
This is one of the first poems I have ever written. I will be expecting tough critisism. I want to know exactly what you think and what you think I should work on so that I will be able to improve.

Is This Really Love?

Every time I hear your voice,
my heart beats just a little faster.
Whenever I am sad or lonely,
I know you'll always be there.
No matter how badly I am feeling,
you can always make me smile.
It feels good to have someone,
who might actually care about me.
I still don't know if I should believe you when you say you love me,
But I am beginning to trust you more and more.
When I first met you,
I was scared to love you.
I couldn't believe I could fall for someone so fast.
Is this really love or just another stupid crush?
I'm scared to love you and then get my heart broken.
I want to believe you when you say you care about me and always will.
I want to believe that you really do love me.
I just don't want to end up getting hurt,
I don't think I could handle losing you.
You say that you would never hurt me;
you say you love me way too much.
But I know my heart will be broken in the end,
you will find someone else to replace me.
I might as well enjoy it while I can,
having someone who at least acts like they care.
So please tell me if this really is love...
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